On the 2nd day of the easter show the first ride I went on was the bumper cars with my sister. I was the best at driving but my sister kept on going faster than me. When the ride was over my dad and my sister were going to a ride. They went on a ride that went forwards for a bit and then it went back and my sister cried. When we were there, my nana and aunt and cousins were playing the games and on the other rides.
2 comments:
The Easter Show sounds like it was fun Shirquera.
It is good to see you finishing your work and describing some different things you experienced at the show.
Next time you write I would like you to see if you can keep your paragraphs to 3-4 sentences and make your paragraphs about one main idea.
Thanks Mr Marks for writing me a comment
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