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Wednesday, 8 August 2012

Before we went to do cross country training we packed up the class and when we were done Mr Marks said “can the year five girls came and line up”.Then he said ready set go and we started to  go and when I got up to Mr Somerville and I could not run any more and then I started to jog. But when I got back to Miss ouana I STOPPED.

Then I went back to school and then we did scratches but then I got tired and went home.

2 comments:

Mr Chris Marks said...

Shirquera I am impressed that you included speech in your writing. I would ask you to please edit your work and try and rework you sentences so that you aren't saying then, then, then.

Mr Chris Marks said...

I forgot to say that it is Miss Ouana not miss Onion. Onion is something you eat.

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